Sorry but i did not like ur story. It was all just cramed into one short space!
U should of explained more about the girl and how afraid she was about being chased. It seemed like she wasnt that scared.
Also, when she heard the doorbell ring, WHY DID SHE ANSWER IT??????!!!!!! She is one stupid girl to answer a doorbell when she is home alone and there is a killer looking 4 her! Wow.
Sorry better luck next time! :)
Apr 05, 2009 Rating
Reply to all of my readers by: Jose the creator of the story
I like all of you i did enjoy making the story as matter of fact I'm planning a sequel I'll try my best to get to it one day so just wait and see I"ll make it a better longer story
Apr 24, 2008 Rating
Awesome by: miracle
I like your story and I think you should have made it long because of what will happen to the parents.
Mar 10, 2008 Rating
Good but could be better!! by: lover of freaks!
If only it was longer and had a freaky message at the end like 'you can run but you can't stay alive. so watch your back because I might be stabbing it! hahahahahahahahaha' it might be you next or something, but a good story!
Feb 21, 2008 Rating
Dude that rocked by: Anonymous
Hey man, this story rocked. It kind of freaked me out! I give you five stars cause it is awesome.
