Needs more description and with better use of language you could create strong tension. Should be a bit longer and more detailed however but I liked the repitition of the start.
May 27, 2011 Rating
Question by: Anonymous
Ok I like how the beginning and the end were the same lines but, why would the man leave his wife there for one year and then come back?
May 29, 2009 Rating
hey hey!! by: Anonymous
thats prett good!! it wasnt exactly scary but it had me goin' and it was alot of fun to read!! keep writin'!!
