The man in chains.

by Will Carpenter
(Indiana)

A bus to transport prisoners

A bus to transport prisoners

There was a prison bus going down a road and it broke down, however there was a crazy guy on the bus and he killed the bus driver and got his knife. Well, there was a camp near by with a log cabin and four guys in the cabin. So one night they kept hearing, STEP...DRAG...STEP...DRAG.


One guy went out to look to see what was going on. He didn't come back. So another two guys went out to see what was going on and they didn't come back. Finally, the last guy went out and he found the three guys dead.

He ran back inside and into a closet and for four days he didn't eat or drink, and inside the cabin he kept hearing STEP...DRAG...STEP...DRAG. (the reason you keep hearing step...drag is because he has a chain on his foot with a heavy ball on the end.)

On the fourth day he again heard STEP...DRAG...STEP...DRAG. The sound kept coming closer and closer to the closet door. The door starts opening and it was a cop with a really long row of chains beating against the floor. The chains that were on the feet of the other prisoners.

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Aug 11, 2008
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by: Jennifer

Too many SO'S! "So then. . ."

Apr 24, 2008
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Cool story
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That was a cool story!

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It was awesome
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I love this story! It's one of the greatest scary stories of all time! I read this story a million and one times for it is my greatest story... spooky, freaky and different all of the time.

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Not very scary.

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Good job bubby. I love you very much.

Apr 04, 2008
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Cool
by: bro

You did a great job. Keep writing.

Mar 24, 2008
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Nice story
by: phillips.kaylee

That was cool. I like it just because you are my friend.

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