Wait.....When they got to the graveyard....Why did skeletons guide them out? You should've expanded on that and not just said 'skeletons guided them out." Overall it was a good story, but not the greatest. I think over tie you'll get better at it :)
Jul 17, 2009 Rating
Cool! by: Anonymous
Wow great job with the story!
The only thing i did not like about it was the ending. but other than that, great job and keep writing!!!! :):):):)
Aug 31, 2008 Rating
Not the best by: Anonymous
I'm sorry to say that was not a good story at all and I think you could do better. Yhe ending didn't make sense and the whole story was weird.
Jun 26, 2008 Rating
Cool story by: NIXI
Cool story LOL!
Mar 12, 2008 Rating
What happened? by: Anonymous
What happened when they were in the graveyard?
Jan 03, 2008 Rating
What?!? by: babu, the super writer
Okay, first of all, you need to enlarge the plot, create more details. If you have a short plot, then try to add as many details to that. But don't get me wrong, it was........cute?
