WOW!!!!! That ends with a great cliffhanger. Have you made a second one of what happens to the parents and what the girl does or goes something like that. I think you should becuase thats great. Also the picture at the top makes you feel spookeir in side. Its a great story.
Oct 02, 2009 Rating
okay.. by: Anonymous
this story is okay...could have been better though. more detail...
ok wats up wit the girl in the white? u gota put more things bout the girl if shes just ther and she dusnt do anything then...well nothin that scary about her!
Jun 11, 2009 Rating
awesome!!! by: Anonymous
This story creeped me out when I read it. Great story!!
Jun 10, 2009 Rating
dauuuuuuummm by: sugarlips
awesome story!!!!!!!!!I literally got chills down my spine and the picture scared me because it just popped up on my screen
May 28, 2009 Rating
yaaaaaa by: Anonymous
hey hey!! pretty good!
May 17, 2009 Rating
Whoa by: Anonymous
I like this story alot actually. One little bit of advice though, when you have an ending like that, lead up to it a little. Otherwise very entertaining.
Apr 15, 2009 Rating
awesome by: tiara
i liked this story it was the best one soo far you should read the t.v screen
