Actually, I didn't get very far past the second paragraph because of the formatting/grammar/punctuation, etc, but I'm assuming that underneath the errors is a good story.
So I would say keep it. Of course, I would suggest finding someone to fix the formatting if you don't want to yourself... I could help if you needed, but I'm not even in high school yet... Haha. =)
Dec 09, 2009 Rating
ring a ring by: mole. h
its ring a ring of roses pocket full of poses atichoo ctichoo we all fall down