Check your spelling. The idea was creepy, but you should be more descriptive. How did she find out? You should draw it out more, make more scary things happen, have him make a guest appearance.
Jun 13, 2009 Rating
sheesh by: Anonymous
sheesh ever check ur spelling sweetheart????
Jan 16, 2009 Rating
well... by: Anonymous
I can see that you could make this story a lot better. I'm not saying you didn't try, but you could try harder.
Nov 02, 2008 Rating
Not good enough by: nawami
Can`t you do any betters than that?
Apr 24, 2008 Rating
Hmmm... by: Lucy
No offense, but I have seen better. That was good though. You can tell it wasn't copyright.