I really like it its exciting. Its scary (sort of) but when it gets to the end it just drops the scary factor. The ending should be a bit more scarier than that. Other than that great story
Oct 31, 2010 Rating
W0o0w! by: Nilu* LuV
i really luv this story...but it was a little complicated and confusion at beginning!!! wish to read more of ur stories!!! keep up the good work!! muahzzzzzzzz
Oct 01, 2009 Rating
sorry by: Anonymous
not to be mean or rude or anything but this wasn't that good of a story. you should have ended it when she found out that her friend was actually dead. i don't know, maybe i'm just to mature for this story or something. I can tell your an ammature by the way you wrote it. work on your material a bit and next time make sure that the story is actually SCARY. i want to feel chills, not think about hot chocoalte and rainbows....
Aug 03, 2009 Rating
reply to comment by haha by: Anonymous
wat the heck, haha!? the begining was great it totally grabbed my attention. if you think this story was bad, there is something SERIOUSLY wrong with you
Jul 17, 2009 Rating
wow! :) by: Nicole
That was so great! I enjoyed every single bit of it!!! Im totaly speechless!!!!!! U should TOTALLY be an auther when u grow up!!!!!!!! And i dont say this 2 everyone. Im not kidding about this... :)
I loved the plot and the problem. I really did think that Allinah was going to go away 4ever. U really make EVERYTHING about the story GREAT!!!! KEEP WRITING A LOT lol!!
Jul 05, 2009 Rating
cool by: Marie
that was unique! it was good!
Jun 13, 2009 Rating
reply to comment by Hater by: Anna
Hater, you couldn't be more disturbed. She did a fantastic job on her story.
Jun 13, 2009 Rating
wow!!!!!!!!!!!! by: Anna
wow wow wow wow wow wow wow wow wow wow wow wow!!!!!!!! amazing!!!! alot of people on this site say that some of the story writers should become authors.....in this case, its really true!! This was an amazing story!!!!! I enjoyed every single second of it!!! you are an INCREDIBLE writer!!!!!! awsome, amazing, incredible, fabulous job!!!!! :D
SIX STARS!!!!
Jun 13, 2009 Rating
Great! by: Anonymous
This story was amazing! I really hate those little teeny short stories, so I was really happy to read a long one! Thanks!Five stars!
Nov 11, 2008 Rating
Good by: neluus
among all the stories i read in this site so far this is the story which i really liked coz it kept the readers attention and i must say if you are under 16 you will be a great write later keep up the gud work and all the best
