You needed to have your story more developed and talk about how the bird ripped him to peices and how his bones cracked and crunched as he hit the tree's and then when he woke up he was sitting in a pool of sweat.... BETTER DEVEOLPE make me wonder ?why?
Sep 21, 2007 Rating
bleak by: Anonymous
wasn't scary
Aug 24, 2007 Rating
A bird by any other name by: Tommy
I liked the way he named the bird. It kinda made you get more involved. Well done Justin.
