No tension Story didn't flow and I struggled to follow it Needs a lot more description What happens with an MP3 player and how can you still be talking if you have dropped dead? Good title through but it doesn't fit. Sorry, but it needs a lot of work!
Jan 20, 2010 Rating
WAAAHH? by: addicted
i dont get this story.... what happened? mmp3? waaaaah? i dont get it... Sister In The Mirrior? Waaaah... Didn't fit together...
Aug 04, 2009 Rating
i dont get it by: Emily
2 things: 1. how does the title fit in with the story 2. why does she get you if you have an MP3 player
all your story needs is some more detail, but good effort.
Apr 15, 2009 Rating
wow by: tiara
Why does she get you with an mp3 player?? Will she come if u have an i-pod??
