October 31

by Gina
(Washington)

Swimming

Swimming

It was October 31, 1774 I was making dinner with my mother. My little sister was washing the clothes in the river and my dad and older brother were getting ready to hunt. I looked out the window and saw my sister walk out into the river like she was hypnotized. I ran outside to stop her with my mother following anxiously behind me wondering where I was going. It was too late my sister was gone.

Everyone thinks I'm crazy until she doesn't come home. Some people thought that there was an ancient monster that swallows people and dives back into the water. They believed the monster ate my sister. People came to our house giving us flowers, food, and gifts. Everyone was sad especially me, because she was my best friend and sister. She was my only friend.

I knew it wasn't right but I couldn't live without her. So tomorrow I plan to jump in the lake.

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Feb 08, 2009
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Wow
by: MOMMY!

Wow I really liked it and good thing it was just a story, and not real. That would be bad, but I really liked it. It was funny and good and it wasnt too short. the short ones are always the best so good job! AND IT WAS NOT BORING... TRUST ME

Nov 15, 2007
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well....
by: Anonymous

well i think you could have spent more time on it

Nov 15, 2007
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it was ok
by: Anonymous

it was ok but too short and boring

Nov 11, 2007
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cool
by: hahe

its good but short

Nov 08, 2007
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Great
by: Brittany

Hey Gina I love your story!
See you at school

Nov 08, 2007
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scaryyyy
by: splunkers

well gina you dont have to kill your self because your sis died lol but nice story see you at school.

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