i think this scared me cuz i have the same name!!! sooooo yeah pretty good im also a "young writer" i have two stories so far.... this story was good but it just needed a little more detail other than that very well put together :)
May 27, 2010 Rating
good by: critics
i thought it was quite good yeah
Mar 16, 2010 Rating
Good Writing by: Austin
I really thought it was good writing and good imagination just try and use more detail more possible but good story what am I rating this 4 stars? Nah it deserves five
Mar 07, 2010 Rating
Very good! by: Victoria
Hello, My name is Victoria and I am thirteen years old, but I have much writing experience. Well done, I loved it! You did what was called a cliffhanger there at the end, and the whole thing was not to broad or not to narrow. The cliffhanger leaves the reader wanting more and thinking about what may happen, making a hypothesis.
The only thing I would suggest is that it was difficult to follow a long, especially at the end, particularly. It was somewhat confusing but the readers get the jist of it and I really did enjoy it you could be a great writer someday so keep it up!
