If we were a movie

by Victoria
(Camas Washington)

Moon

Moon

Amanda Huff was a 16 year old girl who lived in Canada. She was on a date with her goth boyfriend, Mike, at the Salmon Cafe. "If we were a movie, you would be the star, and I would be the moon." He said. "Wow! That's deep." She exclaimed. He shook his head. "Let's go back to my place and catch a movie." he said. "It's getting late, though." She told him. "Please!" he said.


Amanda got up and motioned him to her car. She drove in her beautiful new hummer, to Mike's house. They got out and started up a horror movie. "Where are your parents?" She asked him. "Somewhere, probably in bed." He assured her. "Oh, all right." she said, her eyes glued to the TV. She fell asleep. But when she woke up, she couldn't see anything but pitch black.

She could see something that resembled earth, and a moon with a weird face printed on it. It was Mike's face. "You are stuck here, forever!" He yelled with a sinister laugh. She screamed as the face of the moon, disappeared. She was stuck in a movie, that never ended!

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Oct 27, 2010
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Not bad
by: Elise

Not bad mabey a bit short...yes i do know its a short story but this one was a little to short for my liking. You couldnt really understand the charictors of the story but over all i think it was good mabey a bit more deatail next tim(just a thought).
P.S. Not being mean just trying to help your writing x :)

Oct 02, 2009
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eh..
by: Anonymous

this story really sucked and bone dry killer was just as bad...sorry but thats the truth...

Aug 03, 2009
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heyy
by: Anonymous

ya i read bone dry killer.....let me tell you that story scared me so bad i had to sleep in my parents bed for a few weeks......and im 12!!!! lol i really love your stories and i really hope you write more!

Jun 07, 2009
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good!
by: Anna

good story Vic!!!! that is actually kinda creepy.....cuz i would sooo totally hate that(being stuck in a movie i mean.)

Apr 01, 2009
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Hi...
by: Victoria (the author)

You can read Bone Dry killer and Bloody Barbie, also by me. They both have 5 stars! I am currently writing a REALLY funny novel. Have you read the book diary of a wimpy kid? It's kind of like that! Maybe someone will publish it! :)

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