If only

by Kalina Russell
(California)


She heard a noise up in the attic, but she didn't scream.


She saw him walk by but she didn't scream.

She heard his voice but she didn't scream.

She saw his face but she didn't scream.

She felt him touch her but she didn't scream.

She didn't scream because she couldn't.

Not after he had killed her.

If only...

If only she had payed more attention to who was in the car behind her.

If only she had not gone to the club.

If only...

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Dec 08, 2010
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Coool !!!!
by: Anonymous

Cool. Thats quite cool. Short but really detailed becuase you know whats going on. Well done. Lol. I sound like a teacher anyway. Really good.

Jan 20, 2010
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a poem?
by: addicted

this sounds more like a IF poem. not bad by the way. but you couldve added more events or eloborate or deteails. more horror will also be goood but i liked it :]

Oct 02, 2009
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uuuhhh
by: Anonymous

work ALOT harder. its all in the detail dude.

Jun 03, 2009
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um
by: Anonymous

was this supposed to be scary??? at all??? srry try WAAAAAY harder next time

Mar 19, 2009
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ok
by: Anonymous

listen.... if she's dead, she canit hear. if she's dead, she can't see, if she's dead, she can't feel. This story made no sense and anyway, what happened why shouldn't she have gone to the club and you didn't really explain about the guy who was apparently in the car behind her! So.. ummm.. what happened??

Dec 29, 2008
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Good Job!
by: Steph

Good poem. It didn't bore me. You are telling a story and I think that is important to note. It had a good meaning. Well done. However I think you could have gone into a little more detail, but overall quite good.

Jul 28, 2008
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What!
by: Anonymous

This is supposed to be a story...not a poem. It
barely makes sense...also kinda boring!

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