Halls of Horror floor

by Jose
(Atlantic City )

Shopping can be harmful to your health

Shopping can be harmful to your health

I was just about to go leave when the announcer said "We're going into Code blue. No one can leave from any doors. We're sorry about this"


"Man what are we going to do now we're done shopping, right"" said John stone. "Nope, I forgot one thing in this list. It's supposed to be located on the top floor." I said. "But Britney, haven't you heard that the top floor is haunted. A lot of people went up there and never came back."

"Rumor." I said. "Not really, most of the weeks news have been taken of the top floor and the people missing." said John. I looked over and saw he was serious. A lot of times John can be a good prankster.

"We'll see when we get up there, John. We have to get everything on this list and that old lady will pay us each twenty-five dollars." "Nah I ain't going up there, Britney." I grabbed him by his shirt before he was able to get away. So we got in the elevator and went up to the top floor.

On the top floor everything looked normal. But I wonder how every one of those got lost, I thought. " The S.W.A.T will be approaching any moment" said the Announcer.

Those masked robbers are in big trouble , I said to myself. "well we better start looking." I told John. "Okay, but we better find it quick, who knows what could happen." He was really scared but hey we have to find that thing on the list.

A couple of minutes later we heard moaning. I tried to ignore it but it kept getting louder and scarier. Then when the moaning stopped chains and groaning started to be heard. Then I looked back and John was gone. I Started to get more scared.

Then a hand grabbed me and I was freaked out and I looked back and scary looking thing was behind me. I screamed in shock.

He moaned and kept his hold on me. I ran and ripped his arm off. Then more of them came. I was trapped. Which way to go? I thought to myself.

They came, ripped me apart and drank my blood. "ow, off and stop" was all I could say. The last thing I saw was the approach of the S.W.A.T team.

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Nov 13, 2011
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Needs...
by: Rockz

what attacked you? what happend to Jhon?

Mar 09, 2011
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Attacker?
by: Anonymous

You didn't even say what attacked you!

Apr 12, 2009
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how can you write this if it KILLED you?

May 05, 2008
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Not bad
by: Anonymous

It is a pretty good story. Maybe you should work a little on your paragraph structure, or the way you make dialogs. The plot is very original, and interesting. Nice, twisted ending! Overall, not bad! Keep up the good work.

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