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Oct 17, 2011
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great!!!!
by: andrea

this story was very well put together i love to see that your family supports you keep up the good work... maybe you could check mine out its (it is trying to get in) but its still in the story talk section please tell me if it okay ...... Again loved your story :)

Oct 19, 2009
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great but weak at the end
by: connor14yearssold

it was fantastic the word choice amazing but the ending was weak all iot was is im glad the night was over i mean your best friends just died at least seem sad great and amazing up till the very last 2 sentences tell me if any one agrees plz

Jun 15, 2009
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WOW!!!!
by: YOU

wow tht was one of the scariest stories i read...btw r these srtories real im prettii sure there not bt just making sure
LMAO

Jun 08, 2009
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good job!
by: Anonymous

great story!

Mar 19, 2009
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wow
by: nikki_angle

It's not real is it? it was good and original. I liked it :)

Sep 28, 2008
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Scary
by: Anonymous

The story is so nice I want to right my own as well because I really have a lot of scary experiences too. Good job.

May 30, 2008
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Scary, very scay and spooky
by: Kung Fa

I loved it. It really scared me and my sis. Please give us some advice so we won't think about your story at night.

PhilG (webmaster): Write you own and send it in. That will take your mind off of it. Make it good though or it won't be approved.

May 14, 2008
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Super scary
by: scarygilr

Too scary for words. Have to tell my bffs they'll be creeped! I will sleep with the lights on!

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What are bffs? I either edit what I can make out, or I won't publish it at all. English please. I'll let it go this time.

Webmaster

May 13, 2008
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Scary but nice
by: pauline

That was awesome, nice story.

Apr 24, 2008
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Wow
by: Ivory

Wow, that was awesome! You should make more series! You should become a writer because that story was good!

Apr 24, 2008
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Terrific
by: Shadow

That was one of the best short story I ever read.

Apr 24, 2008
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Scary story
by: bill056

Wow really scary story! My whole body got goosbumps!

Apr 24, 2008
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Sweet
by: YOURWORST

That was awesome and really cool, and scary.

Mar 27, 2008
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What?
by: soccerpro66

Good, but traditional and kind of obvious.

Mar 21, 2008
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It is a very nice story
by: ANGELA

It is a very nice story......I think you could have presented a more horrifying conclusion, but otherwise your story was fabulous! I liked it.

Mar 02, 2008
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Great
by: Anonymous

Wow! This creeped me out but it was great!

Feb 29, 2008
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Good job
by: Love from your Granfather

That's a great short story! Steven King should be worried that you will steal all of his readers. Can't wait for the sequel

Love Umpa

Feb 27, 2008
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I will sleep with the lights on Thank you!
by: Annmarie

WOW! That is some story!!! Now, I hope you're happy. I will have to sleep with the lights on, Excellent writing & wording, I got the chills.

Feb 27, 2008
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I've got chills!
by: Toni

What an awesome creepy story. I especially like the details of the narrator's inner thoughts and feelings, because it gives it such realism. Seriously, I got chills reading it. I'm glad it had a happy ending (well, except for Michelle and Rachel!) Keep on writing!

Feb 27, 2008
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Wow
by: auntie leamberf

Great job Jay. You are going to be a great writer if that is what you choose to do. Keep up the good work.

Feb 26, 2008
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Amazing! Off the seat Amazing!
by: Nahna

As soon as I read the first paragraph, I knew this was the work of Jaylen!...

Jaylen, your words, story line, structure and build up are amazing in this story. Wow! And I live in Salem, Mass. and I got scared! Salem could use an Author like you Jay.

I would love to get a signature on one of your stories. Then one day I can say.... Oh I know that Author, see here's his autograph. That is our Grandson Jaylen!

Your Grandfather and I are always so beaming with pride everyday as we talk of you Jay. Proud, Proud, Proud. We are so blessed!
Can't wait for Toni to read this one!
I love you much, keep up the great Works.
Love Nahna

Feb 25, 2008
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You Are Amazing
by: Mom & Dad

What an amazing story! You are brilliant! We are so proud of you and always remember that the sky is the limit and anything you put your mind to you can achieve. We love you always and forever, Mom and Dad.

Feb 25, 2008
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WOW I Thought I was there
by: Anonymous

I had no idea that this particular story was one written by Jaylen. Then I began to read and knew right away that this must be his work. Your wording, and build up of suspense is amazing. Coming from Salem, Ma where scary stories are told often, this one should be on the list of spooookiest ever told!

Jaylen, you are an inspiration to young and old alike. And your grandfather and I could not be more proud. You must sign something for us so that when your a well known writer we can proudly say; "Oh yeah we know that author alright, and here is his signature to prove it". "He is our grandson"!

We look forward to more and more. Beaming with pride. We are so proud of you Jay!

Love Nahna

Feb 23, 2008
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You sent chills down my spine!!!
by: Roberta Jane Ford

This is a very talented Scary story teller. It sent chills down my spine. Great imagination!! Another Alfred Hitchcock? Maybe? Keep up the good work!!

Feb 23, 2008
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Fantastic Imagination!
by: Nana

This story just pulls you in and keeps you on the edge of your seat till the end. Your an incredible author Jaylen! I am sooooooooooooo proud of you! Keep writing and follow your passion. I look forward to great things coming to you in the future. Your story is amazing and you are amazing! Love you Lots!

Feb 22, 2008
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A Good Story for Campouts
by: Jon

Very nice little scary story. Gets your heart pounding in a very short time.

Feb 22, 2008
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Hemingway Clone
by: Dawn

Jaylen,
You have a great gift for writing (of course I knew that way back in first grade). Keep working at it and someday you will write the "Great American Novel". You are truly a phenomenal young man.

Love Always,
Dawn

Feb 22, 2008
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Steven King who?
by: Alexis

Great story!!! I can't wait to read your first published book, I know it will be wonderful!

Feb 22, 2008
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Awesome
by: Anonymous

This story is awesome! Great word choice and imagination. You are very talented and creative. Keep up the great work. I know we will be reading your stories 10 years from now.

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