it was fantastic the word choice amazing but the ending was weak all iot was is im glad the night was over i mean your best friends just died at least seem sad great and amazing up till the very last 2 sentences tell me if any one agrees plz
Jun 15, 2009 Rating
WOW!!!! by: YOU
wow tht was one of the scariest stories i read...btw r these srtories real im prettii sure there not bt just making sure LMAO
Jun 08, 2009 Rating
good job! by: Anonymous
great story!
Mar 19, 2009 Rating
wow by: nikki_angle
It's not real is it? it was good and original. I liked it :)
Sep 28, 2008 Rating
Scary by: Anonymous
The story is so nice I want to right my own as well because I really have a lot of scary experiences too. Good job.
May 30, 2008 Rating
Scary, very scay and spooky by: Kung Fa
I loved it. It really scared me and my sis. Please give us some advice so we won't think about your story at night.
PhilG (webmaster): Write you own and send it in. That will take your mind off of it. Make it good though or it won't be approved.
May 14, 2008 Rating
Super scary by: scarygilr
Too scary for words. Have to tell my bffs they'll be creeped! I will sleep with the lights on!
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What are bffs? I either edit what I can make out, or I won't publish it at all. English please. I'll let it go this time.
Webmaster
May 13, 2008 Rating
Scary but nice by: pauline
That was awesome, nice story.
Apr 24, 2008 Rating
Wow by: Ivory
Wow, that was awesome! You should make more series! You should become a writer because that story was good!
Apr 24, 2008 Rating
Terrific by: Shadow
That was one of the best short story I ever read.
Apr 24, 2008 Rating
Scary story by: bill056
Wow really scary story! My whole body got goosbumps!
Apr 24, 2008 Rating
Sweet by: YOURWORST
That was awesome and really cool, and scary.
Mar 27, 2008 Rating
What? by: soccerpro66
Good, but traditional and kind of obvious.
Mar 21, 2008 Rating
It is a very nice story by: ANGELA
It is a very nice story......I think you could have presented a more horrifying conclusion, but otherwise your story was fabulous! I liked it.
Mar 02, 2008 Rating
Great by: Anonymous
Wow! This creeped me out but it was great!
Feb 29, 2008 Rating
Good job by: Love from your Granfather
That's a great short story! Steven King should be worried that you will steal all of his readers. Can't wait for the sequel
Love Umpa
Feb 27, 2008 Rating
I will sleep with the lights on Thank you! by: Annmarie
WOW! That is some story!!! Now, I hope you're happy. I will have to sleep with the lights on, Excellent writing & wording, I got the chills.
Feb 27, 2008 Rating
I've got chills! by: Toni
What an awesome creepy story. I especially like the details of the narrator's inner thoughts and feelings, because it gives it such realism. Seriously, I got chills reading it. I'm glad it had a happy ending (well, except for Michelle and Rachel!) Keep on writing!
Feb 27, 2008 Rating
Wow by: auntie leamberf
Great job Jay. You are going to be a great writer if that is what you choose to do. Keep up the good work.
Feb 26, 2008 Rating
Amazing! Off the seat Amazing! by: Nahna
As soon as I read the first paragraph, I knew this was the work of Jaylen!...
Jaylen, your words, story line, structure and build up are amazing in this story. Wow! And I live in Salem, Mass. and I got scared! Salem could use an Author like you Jay.
I would love to get a signature on one of your stories. Then one day I can say.... Oh I know that Author, see here's his autograph. That is our Grandson Jaylen!
Your Grandfather and I are always so beaming with pride everyday as we talk of you Jay. Proud, Proud, Proud. We are so blessed! Can't wait for Toni to read this one! I love you much, keep up the great Works. Love Nahna
Feb 25, 2008 Rating
You Are Amazing by: Mom & Dad
What an amazing story! You are brilliant! We are so proud of you and always remember that the sky is the limit and anything you put your mind to you can achieve. We love you always and forever, Mom and Dad.
Feb 25, 2008 Rating
WOW I Thought I was there by: Anonymous
I had no idea that this particular story was one written by Jaylen. Then I began to read and knew right away that this must be his work. Your wording, and build up of suspense is amazing. Coming from Salem, Ma where scary stories are told often, this one should be on the list of spooookiest ever told!
Jaylen, you are an inspiration to young and old alike. And your grandfather and I could not be more proud. You must sign something for us so that when your a well known writer we can proudly say; "Oh yeah we know that author alright, and here is his signature to prove it". "He is our grandson"!
We look forward to more and more. Beaming with pride. We are so proud of you Jay!
Love Nahna
Feb 23, 2008 Rating
You sent chills down my spine!!! by: Roberta Jane Ford
This is a very talented Scary story teller. It sent chills down my spine. Great imagination!! Another Alfred Hitchcock? Maybe? Keep up the good work!!
Feb 23, 2008 Rating
Fantastic Imagination! by: Nana
This story just pulls you in and keeps you on the edge of your seat till the end. Your an incredible author Jaylen! I am sooooooooooooo proud of you! Keep writing and follow your passion. I look forward to great things coming to you in the future. Your story is amazing and you are amazing! Love you Lots!
Feb 22, 2008 Rating
A Good Story for Campouts by: Jon
Very nice little scary story. Gets your heart pounding in a very short time.
Feb 22, 2008 Rating
Hemingway Clone by: Dawn
Jaylen, You have a great gift for writing (of course I knew that way back in first grade). Keep working at it and someday you will write the "Great American Novel". You are truly a phenomenal young man.
Love Always, Dawn
Feb 22, 2008 Rating
Steven King who? by: Alexis
Great story!!! I can't wait to read your first published book, I know it will be wonderful!
Feb 22, 2008 Rating
Awesome by: Anonymous
This story is awesome! Great word choice and imagination. You are very talented and creative. Keep up the great work. I know we will be reading your stories 10 years from now.
